Ohio Impromptu

Thanks Jiggy. I appreciate the comments. Anyone else have anything to say?

This was about a child on a playground, no? I liked this. It was simple yet vivid. The images were great, and I don't even feel like it needs to ...

Was it supposed to be read to he tune of Away In A Manger? :? I hope so, 'cause otherwise I missed the point.

If anyone can name where the title came from and complete the rest of the line, I'll officially be their biggest fan. Anyway, thanks for all the comments. I guess ...

Loneliness, boredom and alcohol make Luke want write more! I guess you could call this Chapter One. Enjoy. The early morning sun had invaded Edan's room, facing no real resistance, ...

You know I thought it was great. :wink:

I've decided that this is gonna be like a prologue type-of-thing. Chapter one will be commenced soon enough. I've written a bit more to this, but I'm posting it in ...

Very nice! Short but effective. Nothing more to say really. Keep up the great work.

At the moment its kinda hollow, but I could still tell it has quite a story to tell. I look forward to reading the rest of it very much. Very ...

You're pretty much on the right track. Basically its about abortion, but if you saw something else in it then thats great.

Focus on the work 'birth' and that'll take you halfway.

I thought it was great. You took something so philosophical and open to personal interpretation and linked it with something as concrete as science, and I think it worked exceedingly ...

Spectacular!

Its not meant to be taken seriously, so changes aren't really necessary. Thanks guys.

Stunning, as always. No criticism here.